Both Malcolm X and Thoreau make very convincing for their arguments, concerning the matter of taking action against something you see as unjust. While Thoreau was talking to the general people who live under the rule of someone else, Malcolm X was addressing a very specific group of people, primarily African Americans, living in the United States during the year 1964. Both ultimately urge their audience to take a noteworthy stance for what they want done because voting will get you nowhere in society, and it is crucial to stand up for what you believe is right regardless of whether or not it coincides with the law.
Malcolm X believes that African Americans are being shunned in the US, though they should be having equal rights and living the American dream instead of the American nightmare they are currently experiencing. He encourages his followers to not allow the white men to keep control and instead must turn to either the ballot or the bullet in order to get what they seek. Though Thoreau has a similar philosophy, he strongly disagrees with the use of violence. One of the ways he chose to oppose his government was by refusing to pay a tax and instead spending the night in jail. He chose non-aggressive methods to get his point across, which is quite different from Malcolm X who passionately rallied his people together to make their stance against the oppression they were receiving from the government which was supposed to be awarding equal opportunities and rights, instead of redrawing district lines to prevent them from gaining too much power with their ability to vote for example.
Though they may believe in carrying out their points differently, Thoreau and Malcolm X both want their audience to fight for what they believe is right, even if it means going against a corrupt government with a lot of power. Both also choose to reference examples in history of countries/groups that have exemplified what they are encouraging in their speeches. In "The Ballot or the Bullet", Malcolm X talked about the French and the Algerians, whereas Thoreau uses the Mexican American War and slavery as his examples in "Civil Disobedience". In the end, both want the public to realize that an injustice is being thrust upon them and instead of sitting there and "turning their cheek", they must rebel against what the government demands and instead push for their individual rights.
Laura-I thought this was a really interesting take on Malcolm X.
ReplyDeleteThough I'm not sure Thoreau was a comparison option, you did a great
job integrating him into your post nonetheless. Your thesis could have
been a little bit more specifically worded, but the thought seems to
be there. You made strong comparisons between Thoreau and Malcolm X.
However, I think you could have focused a little bit more on the
rhetoric of both Thoreau and Malcolm X's writings. Also, you had a lot
of run-on sentences, so some of those could be split up into shorter
sentences to help get your point across more effectively. Besides
those few minor points, you had a great blog post! Nicely done!
THIS IS FROM MILLE BECAUSE HER COMPUTER WAS NOT POSTING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I thought you had a great blog post. You thesis was good but could have been more specific and arguable. Your thesis is also some what wordy. If you are comparing and contrasting two writers i would not have started your second paragraph with Malcolm X... your blog may have been better organized if you thought of an idea of how they were similar or different and then gave examples on both sides. Thoreau would have been a good addition to a comparison but i would have used another one of the articles. However you did a good job. :)
ReplyDeleteSorry for the late post; I didn't finish in class and almost forgot. Anyways...
ReplyDeleteThis is a great post. you made good connections between Thoreau and Malcolm X, and supported them well. I'd suggest integrating more quotes so that your ideas are supported better. Also, paying attention to the way the two write may have added a lot to the post; for example, Thoreau writes in a very restrained tone whereas Malcolm X is much more energetic and passionate. Regardless, this was well done and I look forward to your next post
Laura, I agree with Millie, Stewart, and Sarah.
ReplyDeleteI think this is an interesting comparison. The thesis is solid but could be a little riskier. Likewise, your points of comparison are fine, although they get off-focus a bit near the end when you discuss how both use other countries as points of comparison. While it's true and interesting, if it doesn't further your thesis, save it for another argument.
And, as Millie pointed out, you've got to work on those run-ons. Practice in the blogs--really pay attention to the sentence-level stuff--so that it starts to become second nature.